PW-WR draft 2 instructions and discussion (huang rui kee jeng needs help)
WR Draft 1 Problems..
Conclusion
We are wasting word count here!! DO NOT SUMMARISE our project! MOVE ON TO WHAT WE HOPE(i.e what we hope our project can achieve)
For the Future Application part / PROPOSED STRATEGIES
FOR SPORTAN
DO NOT PROMOTE THE GAME! (i.e ANY SENTENCE THAT YOU FEEL THAT YOU'RE TALKING LIKE A PROMOTER SHOULD BE ERASED.)
EXPLANATION OF FIGURES is required. DO NOT EXPECT PEOPLE TO UNDERSTAND FIGURES which doesn't make sense( e.g From Sportan the figure on the pentagon shaped.)
WE ONLY NEED TO LOOK AT EFFECTIVENESS AND FEASIBILITY!
WE MUST CLEARLY STATE OUR GI first then do A&E
kCalmeter - recheck the existing strategies
Mr Yip thinks that we are borrowing the idea from our existing strategies - Online Calorie Calculator. He also said that we actually claimed that this existing strategy is not good AND YET we still have this web based idea on kCalmeter
so im supposed to edit the idea entirely?
Yeap. JUST DO IT. Have faith in yourself- JOEL-- Srsly.
seriously??
ihonestly i wouldnt mind typing-- KJ SIOL.
Because in the end.. IAN WILL BE THE FINAL ONE DOING ALL THE TYPING..
DAMN!
Have problems in organising our points/ideas ----> TRY NOT TO REPEAT TERMS
Introduction of strategy needs to be included. Introduction includes the purpose of the strategy in meeting future application; explicitly showing how the idea is linked to the learning point.
INCUDE TARGET AUDIENCE HERE
NEED TO BE SUMMARISED AND BRIEF?
For the Existing Strategies
Subtopic
Phrasing problems
INTRODUCTION
INTRODUCTION SHOULD NOT INCLUDE TARGET AUDIENCE JUST YET.
Figures need to have captions
Need to make the learning points and title explicit
Phrasing of sentences
Need a proper case study introduction--
FOUND THIS AWESOME SENTENCE:
A culture can be largely learned and understood by observing and practicing what its members do.
PW- 20th August 2012
WORK ALLOCATION
Kee Jeng-- Work on the KCalmeter problems or corrections. Pls refer to the left column for the stuff that needs to be done. Anything to clarify go to Huang Rui cos he has the "commented" copy
Joel-- Vet Sportan(after Ian is done) and identify areas that can be replaced by EOM and also work on the Case study portion. + any other stuff that needs to be done.
Ian-- Refer to the pictures of the examplar WR and make the changes in the CONTENT PAGE and SPORTAN area- for corrections. Pls check with Huang Rui cos he has the master copy.
Meng Yue-- Formatting of the WR draft and help huang rui with the research questions. If u need a copy of the WR. Pls tell Joel.
HR-- Work on Bibliography and the research questions (Try to finalise if possible)
